Update scene-4-00.xml (#229)

public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-00.xml

@@ -4,22 +4,22 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>In the endless darkness, [\s]the dead Celestial's consciousness awakened</p>
+    <p>In the endless darkness, [\s]the dead Celestial's consciousness awakened.</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-01白光转场"></se>
   <delay t="0.15"></delay>
   <transition in="1" stop="0.5" out="1.5" color="#ffffff" mode="fade"></transition>
-  <mono>In the beginning, the new consciousness was like the birth of the world, just a spot of light in the universe</mono>
+  <mono>In the beginning, the new consciousness was like the birth of the world: just a spot of light in the universe.</mono>
   <se id="01-01恢复意识" looptimes="-1"></se>
   <bg img="BGIntel1" duration="3"></bg>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>『Its』power is still limitedIt can neither receive signals from the senses, nor send them to the nerves</p>
+    <p>『Its』power is still limited. It can neither receive signals from the senses, nor send them to the nerves.</p>
   </mono>
   <bg img="BGIntel3" duration="5"></bg>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>In that chaos, the weak consciousness followed its ancient instincts. Blindly but firmly it awakens and starts growing</p>
+    <p>In that chaos, the weak consciousness followed its ancient instincts. Blindly but firmly it awakened and started growing.</p>
   </mono>
   <delay t="0.2"></delay>
   <mono pageend="true">
@@ -28,8 +28,8 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>It has not discovered its own death yet[\s]</p>
+    <p>It has not discovered its own death yet.[\s]</p>
-    <p>The girl refuses to acknowledge her own death——</p>
+    <p>The girl refuses to acknowledge her own death.</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-01恢复意识" looptimes="0"></se>
   <transition in="2" stop="0" out="0" color="#ffffff" mode="dissolve"></transition>
@@ -41,52 +41,52 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Judging by common sense, the immortal Celestial is indeed dead</p>
+    <p>Judging by common sense, the immortal Celestial is indeed dead.</p>
   </mono>
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   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片1"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
-  <mono>Her right leg has been cut off, and it's missing from the ankle below</mono>
+  <mono>Her right leg has been cut off, and it's missing from the ankle below.</mono>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片2"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
-  <mono>Her hands were crippled</mono>
+  <mono>Her hands were crippled.</mono>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片3"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
-  <mono>All her internal organs were destroyed</mono>
+  <mono>All her internal organs were destroyed.</mono>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片4"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Her chest had taken more than a dozen blows</p>
+    <p>Her chest had taken more than a dozen blows.</p>
   </mono>
   <cg duration="0.5"></cg>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>However, the deadliest wound was on her head</p>
+    <p>However, the deadliest wound was on her head.</p>
   </mono>
   <transition in="0.6" stop="0" out="0" color="#8b0000" mode="dissolve"></transition>
   <transition mode="fade" in="0" stop="0.2" out="0.15" color="#8b0000"></transition>
   <se id="01-02大剑命中"></se>
   <motion chara="-4" action="shake" duration="0.1" range="80" direction="horizontal"></motion>
   <bg img="BGBlood1"></bg>
-  <mono>It was wounded by a sword</mono>
+  <mono>It was wounded by a sword.</mono>
   <mono inline="true">
     <p></p>
     <p>The sword struck her forehead,</p>
   </mono>
   <mono inline="true"> destroyed her brain,</mono>
-  <mono>and passed through to the back of her head</mono>
+  <mono> and passed through to the back of her head.</mono>
-  <mono>If it were for any other person, it would have died with just one of those injuries</mono>
+  <mono>If it were for any other person, it would have died with just one of those injuries.</mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>But the「Celestial」wasn't ordinary</p>
+    <p>But the「Celestial」wasn't ordinary.</p>
   </mono>
   <transition mode="eye" in="2" stop="0" out="2" color="#000000"></transition>
   <se id="01-03野外小屋loop" looptimes="-1"></se>
@@ -94,20 +94,20 @@
   <delay t="2.2"></delay>
   <bg></bg>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
-  <mono pageend="true">The Celestial is an immortal that never died</mono>
+  <mono pageend="true">The Celestial is an immortal that never died.</mono>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
   <mono>
     <p>Her body wouldn't die even after thousands of years,[\s]</p>
-    <p>neither would her soul, even after tens of thousands of years[\s]</p>
+    <p>neither would her soul, even after tens of thousands of years.[\s]</p>
     <p></p>
     <p>She completely overthrew the laws of nature,</p>
-    <p>she was the one and only Celestial of Shenzhou</p>
+    <p>she was the one and only Celestial of Shenzhou.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>This was the very essence of the body that was now lying still in the stone chamber</p>
+    <p>This was the very essence of the body that was now lying still in the stone chamber.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono>And so,</mono>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
@@ -117,8 +117,8 @@
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>Starting from each braincell,</p>
+    <p>starting from each braincell,</p>
-    <p>the Celestial's mind and body began a long period of repair and reconstruction</p>
+    <p>the Celestial's mind and body began a long period of repair and reconstruction.</p>
   </mono>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
   <delay t="7"></delay>
@@ -169,36 +169,37 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Gradually, the Celestial's 『consciousness』started perceiving its surroundings</p>
+    <p>Gradually, the Celestial's 『consciousness』started perceiving its surroundings.</p>
   </mono>
   <transition mode="move" in="1" stop="0.5" out="0.5" color="#000000" direction="left" custom="thick"></transition>
   <letterbox action="show_letterbox" height="400" duration="0"></letterbox>
   <se id="01-03野外小屋loop" looptimes="-1"></se>
   <bg img="BGSky00"></bg>
-  <mono>She saw the line of light and shadow going from east to west and from west to east through the little window of the chamber</mono>
+  <mono>She saw the line of light and shadow going from east to west and from west to east through the little window of the chamber.</mono>
   <letterbox action="show_letterbox" height="300" duration="1"></letterbox>
   <bg img="BGSky01"></bg>
-  <mono>She could smell the odor of the withering plants mixing with rotting insects</mono>
+  <mono>She could smell the odor of the withering plants mixing with rotting insects.</mono>
   <letterbox action="show_letterbox" height="200" duration="1"></letterbox>
   <bg img="BGSky02"></bg>
-  <mono>She heard the sound of falling leaves, welcoming the autumn, and the snow-covered branches swaying</mono>
+  <mono>She heard the sound of falling leaves, welcoming the autumn, and the snow-covered branches swaying.</mono>
   <letterbox action="show_letterbox" duration="1" height="100"></letterbox>
   <bg img="BGSky04"></bg>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>Then she felt pain, numbness, swelling, itching... every part of her body was screaming</p>
+    <p>Then, she felt pain, numbness, swelling, itching...</p>
-    <p>An endless torment took her over</p>
+    <p>Every part of her body was screaming.</p>
+    <p>An endless torment took her over...</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-03野外小屋loop" looptimes="0"></se>
   <letterbox action="hide_letterbox" duration="0"></letterbox>
   <bg img="PureBlack" duration="3"></bg>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>...an endless recovery, an endless pain</p>
+    <p>...an endless recovery, an endless pain.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>The Celestial remains silent</p>
+    <p>The Celestial remains silent.</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-08扰乱心神杂音loop" looptimes="-1"></se>
   <bg img="BGNeuron03" duration="3"></bg>
@@ -207,29 +208,29 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「     Who           am I        ?      」</p>
+    <p>「     Who         am         I         ?      」</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>Her mind is still confused, she remembers some things but forgets more and more</p>
+    <p>Her mind is still confused, she remembers some things but forgets more and more.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono chara="000" pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「     Where           is this        ?      」</p>
+    <p>「     Where         is         this         ?      」</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>With just fragments in her memory, she can't put together the answer she seeks</p>
+    <p>With just fragments in her memory, she can't put together the answer she seeks.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono chara="000" pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「     …          wh-          ?      」</p>
+    <p>「     ...          wh-          ?      」</p>
   </mono>
   <bgm id="千年之羽" looptimes="0"></bgm>
   <se id="01-08扰乱心神杂音loop" looptimes="0"></se>
@@ -240,27 +241,27 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Suddely, thinking of that made long abandoned emotions swell up in her chest</p>
+    <p>Suddely, thinking of that made long abandoned emotions swell up in her chest.</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-09心跳loop" looptimes="-1"></se>
   <event action="hide_ui" duration="0.5"></event>
   <motion action="shake" chara="-4" range="30" direction="default" duration="0.1" delay="0.1"></motion>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Seven…</p>
+    <p>Seven...</p>
   </mono>
   <delay t="0.2"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>The Seven people closest to her</p>
+    <p>The Seven people closest to her.</p>
   </mono>
-  <mono>The Seven Swords that stayed by her side for the longest time</mono>
+  <mono>The Seven Swords that stayed by her side for the longest time.</mono>
   <motion chara="-4" action="shake" duration="0.1" range="30" direction="default" looptimes="1"></motion>
   <mono pageend="true" inline="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>Seven people that conspired, lured her to doom[\s]</p>
+    <p>Seven people that conspired, lured her to doom.[\s]</p>
-    <p>Seven Swords that trapped her and killed her</p>
+    <p>Seven Swords that trapped her and killed her.</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-09心跳loop" looptimes="0"></se>
   <transition mode="dissolve" in="1" stop="0.5" out="1" color="#000000"></transition>
@@ -271,30 +272,30 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「       …              Why        ?      」</p>
+    <p>「       ...              Why         ?      」</p>
   </mono>
   <transition mode="fade" in="1" stop="0.5" out="1" color="#000000"></transition>
   <bg img="BGNeuron01"></bg>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢沉睡end"></cg>
   <mono pageend="true" inline="true">
-    <p>Many emotions swelled up endlessly[\s]</p>
+    <p>Many emotions swelled up endlessly:[\s]</p>
-    <p>Anger,[\s]</p>
+    <p>anger,[\s]</p>
-    <p>Doubt,[\s]</p>
+    <p>doubt,[\s]</p>
-    <p>Resentment,[\s]</p>
+    <p>resentment,[\s]</p>
-    <p>Fury,[\s]</p>
+    <p>fury,[\s]</p>
-    <p>and sadness, at the end</p>
+    <p>and sadness, at the end.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono chara="000">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「… why?」</p>
+    <p>「 ...why? 」</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>There's no answer, only the desire to find one</p>
+    <p>There's no answer, only the desire to find one.</p>
   </mono>
   <event action="hide_ui" duration="3"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢苏醒end" duration="3"></cg>
@@ -304,21 +305,21 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>… the Celestial decide to wait</p>
+    <p>...the Celestial decided to wait.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>She has protected this land for countless years. time doesn't matter for her anymore</p>
+    <p>She has protected this land for countless years. Time doesn't matter for her anymore.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true" inline="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>She will keep waiting until her body and mind are fully healed[\s]</p>
+    <p>She will keep waiting until her body and mind are fully healed,[\s]</p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Then she will find those Seven and ask them why they killed her</p>
+    <p>then she will find those Seven and ask them why they killed her.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
@@ -326,30 +327,32 @@
     <p></p>
     <p>A strong desire was branded deep into her consciousness,</p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>urging her, pushing her, changing her</p>
+    <p>urging her,</p>
+    <p>pushing her,</p>
+    <p>changing her.</p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>The wait becomes a habit and the pain becomes natural</p>
+    <p>The wait becomes a habit and the pain becomes natural.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>And then…</p>
+    <p>And then...</p>
   </mono>
   <transition mode="clock" in="2" stop="0.5" out="0" color="#000000"></transition>
   <transition mode="fade" in="0" stop="0" out="2" color="#000000"></transition>
   <cg></cg>
   <mono>
     <p>Pain</p>
-    <p>Pain</p>
+    <p>pain</p>
-    <p>Pain</p>
+    <p>pain</p>
-    <p>Pain</p>
+    <p>pain</p>
   </mono>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Endless recovery and endless pain</p>
+    <p>Endless recovery and endless pain.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>The Celestial remains silent</p>
+    <p>The Celestial remains silent.</p>
   </mono>
   <transition in="1" stop="0.1" out="1" color="#000000" mode="dissolve"></transition>
   <bg img="PureBlack"></bg>
@@ -359,7 +362,7 @@
     <p></p>
     <p>She has endured for a long time,</p>
   </mono>
-  <mono pageend="true">she can still endure it</mono>
+  <mono pageend="true">she can still endure it.</mono>
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   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <transition in="1" stop="0.5" out="1" color="#000000" mode="fade"></transition>