From cc86541027b6a34a882c3522f3bec6264c11a4dc Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sakura Knoll <96382514+sakura-knoll@users.noreply.github.com> Date: Wed, 1 Mar 2023 14:48:06 +0900 Subject: [PATCH] Apply rev (#247) --- public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-00.xml | 42 +++++++++++------------ public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-01.xml | 32 ++++++++--------- 2 files changed, 37 insertions(+), 37 deletions(-) diff --git a/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-00.xml b/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-00.xml index 0a42366b..712b8484 100644 --- a/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-00.xml +++ b/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-00.xml @@ -24,7 +24,7 @@

In that chaos, the weak consciousness followed its ancient instincts.[\s]

-

Blindly but firmly it awakened and started growing.

+

Blindly but firmly, it awakened and started growing.

@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@

-

It has not discovered its own death yet.[\s]

+

It has not realized its own death yet.[\s]

The girl refuses to acknowledge her own death.

@@ -57,24 +57,24 @@ - Her hands were crippled. + Her hands are crippled. - All her internal organs were destroyed. + All her internal organs are destroyed.

-

Her chest had taken more than a dozen blows.

+

Her chest has taken more than a dozen blows.

-

However, the deadliest wound was on her head.

+

However, the deadliest wound is on her head.

@@ -88,7 +88,7 @@ destroyed her brain, and passed through to the back of her head. - If it were for any other person, it would have died with just one of those injuries. + If it were for any other person, they would have died with just one of those injuries.

But the「Celestial」wasn't ordinary.

@@ -99,7 +99,7 @@ - The Celestial is an immortal that never died. + The Celestial is an immortal being that never died.

Her body wouldn't die even after thousands of years,[\s]

@@ -160,7 +160,7 @@

-

repairing the damaged organs...

+

repairing the damaged organs……

@@ -196,15 +196,15 @@ -

Then, she felt pain,[\s] numbness,[\s] swelling,[\s] itching...[\s] every part of her body was screaming.[\s]

-

An endless torment took her over...

+

Then, she felt pain,[\s] numbness,[\s] swelling,[\s] itching……[\s] every part of her body was screaming.[\s]

+

An endless torment took her over……

-

...an endless recovery,[\s] an endless pain.

+

……an endless recovery,[\s] an endless pain.

@@ -240,7 +240,7 @@

-

「 ... wh- ? 」

+

「 …… wh- ? 」

@@ -259,7 +259,7 @@

-

Seven...

+

Seven……

@@ -287,7 +287,7 @@

-

「 ... Why ? 」

+

「 …… Why ? 」

@@ -307,7 +307,7 @@

-

「 ...why? 」

+

「 ……why? 」

@@ -324,7 +324,7 @@

-

...the Celestial decided to wait.

+

……the Celestial decided to wait.

@@ -355,7 +355,7 @@

-

And then...

+

And then……

@@ -363,11 +363,11 @@

Pain[\s]

-

pain[\s]

+

Pain[\s]

-

pain[\s]

+

Pain[\s]

-

pain[\s]

+

Pain[\s]

Endless recovery and endless pain.

diff --git a/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-01.xml b/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-01.xml index 1c8a44f5..e6133792 100644 --- a/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-01.xml +++ b/public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-01.xml @@ -5,11 +5,11 @@

-

This is a tiny "stop" in the desert.

+

This is a tiny stop in the desert.

-

1400 years ago, wandering Tuik people discovered an oasis here.

+

1400 years ago, wandering Turkish people discovered an oasis here.

@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@

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Years passed by unhurried and there was change.[\s]

+

Years passed by like flowing water, and the world changed rapidly.[\s]

Civilizations rose and fell; humans came and went, but they all sunk into the endless sands of the long river of history.

@@ -69,7 +69,7 @@ - Looking around in the steaming heat, layers of sand dunes looked like waves rippling endlessly. + Looking around in the steaming heat, layers of sand dunes look like waves rippling endlessly. @@ -77,17 +77,17 @@ *sigh* -

The inhabitant of the oasis now sighed beneath the shadows of the ancient wall.[\s]

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This dull and sunbathed desert, he had seen the scene for three months now.

+

The inhabitant of the oasis sighed beneath the shadows of the ancient wall.[\s]

+

He had seen the scene of this dull and sunbathed desert for three months now.

*sigh* -

The man sighed again.

+

The man sighs again.

The desert’s heat and desolation agitates him.

-

Looking around, everything in his vision remained the same;

+

Looking around, everything in his vision remains the same;

the sun, the sky, the yellow sand…… are all immobile and motionless.

Even the air is stiff, there’s not a breeze around him.

@@ -101,11 +101,11 @@ In the distance, his companion responded by simply shaking his head, signaling nothing out of the ordinary was spotted.

The other man knew very well the man was just starting a conversation to alleviate his boredom.

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But within this baking desert, talking was a luxury.

+

But in this desert like an oven, talking was a luxury.

Opening his mouth would be a waste of saliva.

-

The guard of the 「Golden Sand Gang」 didn’t want to expend the effort.

+

It wouldn't be worth the effort for the 「Golden Sand Gang」.

@@ -138,23 +138,23 @@ -

……He knows very well that the Boss didn’t take him lightly just because he’s new.

+

……He knew very well that the Boss didn’t take him lightly just because he’s new.

Normally gang members take turns looking after their base, it just so happens today is his turn.

Even though the Golden Sand Gang will still reward him all the same despite him staying back to protect the base.

But- he is a fighter, a real killer.

-

Robbing, looting, kidnapping, murdering… These are what he signed up to do.

-

The clashes of blades and the slicing of flesh… Those are the real rewards he seeks.

+

Robbing, looting, kidnapping, murdering…… These are what he signed up to do.

+

The clashes of blades and the slicing of flesh…… Those are the real rewards he seeks.

-

[em bold color=#ff0000]Battle[/em] and [em bold color=#ff0000]Killing[/em]; these are the things that the man values.[\s]

+

[em bold color=#ff0000]Battling[/em] and [em bold color=#ff0000]Killing[/em]; these are the things that the man values.[\s]

No doubt about it, this man is the evil amongst the evil.[\s]

Not only does he bear no shame in this, he prides himself with this as proof of who he really is.

As such, being left out of such a 「Big Fish」 makes the man feel extremely

-

humiliated and angry[\s]

+

humiliated and angry.[\s]

It’s this anger that frustrates him and makes him talkative.

@@ -176,7 +176,7 @@ In front of him, a girl was walking towards them.

The man wasn’t hallucinating, this isn’t one of those "mirages" that appear in the desert.[\s]

-

The girl… she’s walking slowly towards them from the other end of the desert.

+

The girl…… she was walking slowly towards them from the other end of the desert.

「R-Rong——!」