first commit - scene 4-00 (TEST) (#249)

* FIRST COMMIT - SCENE 4-00

first commit, it's a test but also a real review of the test.
"hey haelle, you already reviewed this part though?"
"yeah but it was really bad, I was doing single dialog review instead of reviewing the scene as a whole"

The major changes here a uniformisation of the tenses: everything now respects the past tense as recommended in stories. You can learn more here: https://centralschool.ie/english-grammar/narrative-tenses/
Another major change are the "……" becoming "…", since the first form doesn't exist in english

* Finalize scene-4-00

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Co-authored-by: Sakura Knoll <s4kura.knoll@gmail.com>

public/novels/7s/en-US/xml/scene-4-00.xml

@@ -18,7 +18,7 @@
   <bg img="BGIntel1" duration="3"></bg>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>『Its』power is still limited. [\s] It can neither receive signals from the senses, nor send them to the nerves.</p>
+    <p>『Its』power was still limited. [\s] It could neither receive signals from the senses, nor send them to the nerves.</p>
   </mono>
   <bg img="BGIntel3" duration="5"></bg>
   <mono pageend="true">
@@ -34,7 +34,7 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p>It has not realized its own death yet.[\s]</p>
-    <p>The girl refuses to acknowledge her own death.</p>
+    <p>The girl refused to acknowledge her own death.</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-01恢复意识" looptimes="0"></se>
   <transition in="2" stop="0" out="0" color="#ffffff" mode="dissolve"></transition>
@@ -46,35 +46,35 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Judging by common sense, the immortal Celestial is indeed dead.</p>
+    <p>Judging by common sense, the immortal Celestial was indeed dead.</p>
   </mono>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片1"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
-  <mono>Her right leg has been cut off, and it's missing from the ankle below.</mono>
+  <mono>Her right leg had been cut off from the ankle down.</mono>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片2"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
-  <mono>Her hands are crippled.</mono>
+  <mono>Her hands were crippled.</mono>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片3"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
-  <mono>All her internal organs are destroyed.</mono>
+  <mono>All her internal organs were destroyed.</mono>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢碎片4"></cg>
   <delay t="0.5"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Her chest has taken more than a dozen blows.</p>
+    <p>Her chest had taken more than a dozen blows.</p>
   </mono>
   <cg duration="0.5"></cg>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>However, the deadliest wound is on her head.</p>
+    <p>However, the deadliest wound was on her head.</p>
   </mono>
   <transition in="0.6" stop="0" out="0" color="#8b0000" mode="dissolve"></transition>
   <transition mode="fade" in="0" stop="0.2" out="0.15" color="#8b0000"></transition>
@@ -86,7 +86,7 @@
     <p></p>
     <p>The sword struck her forehead,</p>
   </mono>
-  <mono inline="true"> destroyed her brain,</mono>
+  <mono inline="true"> destroyed her brain</mono>
   <mono> and passed through to the back of her head.</mono>
   <mono>If it were for any other person, they would have died with just one of those injuries.</mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
@@ -160,7 +160,7 @@
   <se id="01-05痊愈"></se>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>repairing the damaged organs……</p>
+    <p>repairing the damaged organs…</p>
   </mono>
   <delay t="2"></delay>
   <transition in="3" stop="0.5" out="0" color="#ffffff" mode="halo"></transition>
@@ -196,19 +196,19 @@
   <letterbox action="show_letterbox" duration="1" height="100"></letterbox>
   <bg img="BGSky04"></bg>
   <mono pageend="true">
-    <p>Then, she felt pain,[\s] numbness,[\s] swelling,[\s] itching……[\s] every part of her body was screaming.[\s]</p>
+    <p>Then, she felt pain,[\s] numbness,[\s] swelling,[\s] itching…[\s] every part of her body was screaming.[\s]</p>
-    <p>An endless torment took her over……</p>
+    <p>An endless torment took her over…</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-03野外小屋loop" looptimes="0"></se>
   <letterbox action="hide_letterbox" duration="0"></letterbox>
   <bg img="PureBlack" duration="3"></bg>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>……an endless recovery,[\s] an endless pain.</p>
+    <p>…an endless recovery,[\s] an endless pain.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>The Celestial remains silent.</p>
+    <p>The Celestial remained silent.</p>
   </mono>
   <se id="01-08扰乱心神杂音loop" looptimes="-1"></se>
   <bg img="BGNeuron03" duration="3"></bg>
@@ -221,8 +221,8 @@
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>Her mind is still confused. [\s]</p>
+    <p>Her mind was still confused. [\s]</p>
-    <p>She remembers some things but forgets more and more.</p>
+    <p>She remembered some things but forgot more and more.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono chara="000" pageend="true">
     <p></p>
@@ -233,14 +233,14 @@
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>With just fragments in her memory, she can't put together the answer she seeks.</p>
+    <p>With just fragments in her memory, she couldn't put together the answer she seeked.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono chara="000" pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「     ……          wh-          ?      」</p>
+    <p>「     …          wh-          ?      」</p>
   </mono>
   <bgm id="千年之羽" looptimes="0"></bgm>
   <se id="01-08扰乱心神杂音loop" looptimes="0"></se>
@@ -259,7 +259,7 @@
   <motion action="shake" chara="-4" range="30" direction="default" duration="0.1" delay="0.1"></motion>
   <mono>
     <p></p>
-    <p>Seven……</p>
+    <p>Seven…</p>
   </mono>
   <delay t="0.2"></delay>
   <event action="show_ui"></event>
@@ -287,7 +287,7 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「       ……              Why         ?      」</p>
+    <p>「       …              Why         ?      」</p>
   </mono>
   <transition mode="fade" in="1" stop="0.5" out="1" color="#000000"></transition>
   <bg img="BGNeuron01"></bg>
@@ -307,14 +307,14 @@
   <mono chara="000">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>「 ……why? 」</p>
+    <p>「 …why? 」</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>There's no answer, only the desire to find one.</p>
+    <p>There was no answer, only the desire to find one.</p>
   </mono>
   <event action="hide_ui" duration="3"></event>
   <cg img="CG_第一折_赤鸢苏醒end" duration="3"></cg>
@@ -324,22 +324,22 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>……the Celestial decided to wait.</p>
+    <p>…the Celestial decided to wait.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p>She has protected this land for countless years.[\s]</p>
-    <p>Time doesn't matter for her anymore.</p>
+    <p>Time didn't matter for her anymore.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true" inline="true">
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>She will keep waiting until her body and mind are fully healed,[\s]</p>
+    <p>She would keep waiting until her body and mind are fully healed,[\s]</p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>then she will find those Seven[\s]</p>
+    <p>then she would find those Seven[\s]</p>
     <p></p>
     <p>and ask them why they killed her.</p>
   </mono>
@@ -350,12 +350,12 @@
     <p>pushing her,[\s]</p>
     <p>changing her.[\s]</p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>The wait becomes a habit[\s]</p>
+    <p>The wait became a habit[\s]</p>
-    <p>and the pain becomes natural.</p>
+    <p>and the pain became natural.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
     <p></p>
-    <p>And then……</p>
+    <p>And then…</p>
   </mono>
   <transition mode="clock" in="2" stop="0.5" out="0" color="#000000"></transition>
   <transition mode="fade" in="0" stop="0" out="2" color="#000000"></transition>
@@ -372,7 +372,7 @@
     <p>Endless recovery and endless pain.</p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
-    <p>The Celestial remains silent.</p>
+    <p>The Celestial remained silent.</p>
   </mono>
   <transition in="1" stop="0.1" out="1" color="#000000" mode="dissolve"></transition>
   <bg img="PureBlack"></bg>
@@ -380,11 +380,11 @@
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
     <p></p>
-    <p>She has endured for a long time,</p>
+    <p>She had been enduring this for a long time,</p>
     <p></p>
   </mono>
   <mono pageend="true">
-    <p>she can still endure it.</p>
+    <p>she could still endure it.</p>
   </mono>
   <bgm looptimes="0"></bgm>
   <event action="hide_ui"></event>